Class began with a review of SOAPS+Claim for the introduction to Mark Bittman's Food Matters. We paid particular attention to the several claims made in the second section of the introduction. Mr. Zartler pointed out that an introduction for a non-fiction book should mention all of the major claims presented in the book.
Next Mr. Zartler lectured on the proper punctuation and presentation of dialogue. He also gave a lesson on using blocking rather than adverbs to show not tell what is going on in a scene.
Rather than:
This is better:
Next Mr. Zartler lectured on the proper punctuation and presentation of dialogue. He also gave a lesson on using blocking rather than adverbs to show not tell what is going on in a scene.
Rather than:
“Hey, you need
to check me out,” Shelly said deviously.
Deon replied
nervously, “Why?”
“You will want
to see this, I’m sure,” she teased.
This is better:
“Hey,
you need to check me out,” Shelly whispered into the phone.
“Why?”
sprang from Deon’s mouth.
“You
will want to see this…. I’m sure…”.
Students then had time to conference, revise, and edit their stories.
Food as Symbol stories are due in class on Thursday.
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